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Some people believe that students should acquire working experience during their gap year instead of traveling. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some feel that if a student decides to take a gap year it is better to
work
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 than to
travel
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. I am generally in agreement with
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 proposition as it will better prepare individuals to choose a university major. Those who argue in favour of
travel
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 contend that after school, individuals may be too busy to
travel
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 for an extended period. Graduates must typically either begin applying for graduate school or for positions in the workforce. Once a person has a job, they will
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 only have limited time for holidays, most of which they are likely to spend with family.
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 is why many high school graduates take advantage of the freedom before university to explore exotic destinations that require long flights like countries in Southeast Asia and South America.
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, there is immense value in
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 experience that can inform one’s future
career
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 choices. Most students are ill-equipped to make a
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 choice at the age of 18 and
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 is reflected in the number of graduates who switch jobs and never establish a
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 in their field of study. By working for a year, not only will students have a firmer understanding of the challenges of the typical workweek, but they might
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 gain perspective as to what kind of
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 they enjoy.
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, a prospective film student who interns at a film studio may decide that they would prefer to
work
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 in a less stressful environment and
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 change majors. In conclusion, despite the singular opportunity to
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 that a gap year provides, it is more important to
work
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 and learn one’s
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 inclinations. There could naturally
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 be some balance between
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 and
travel
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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