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The maps below show the changes that took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 2000 and 2013.

The maps below show the changes that took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 2000 and 2013.
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The given maps illustrate seafood vacation
place's
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 changes in Templeton during
thirteen-year
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a thirteen-year
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 period, from 2000 to 2013.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
,
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this
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 place had developed and become more industrial and modern over the given period.
According to
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 the maps, in 2000
seaside
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the seaside
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 resort of Templeton was
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a quite
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quite
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quiet
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,
natural
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a natural
the natural
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 and undeveloped place with a large
quantity
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number
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 of trees, house apartments and public facilities
such
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 as
school
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schools
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,
hospital
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hospitals
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 and
railway
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a railway
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 station,
while
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 by 2013 it had significant changes. First of all, the trees had been cut down and
modern
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a modern
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 factory was built
insted
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instead
 of them.
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,
new
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a new
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 airport had been constructed on the right side of the river and the trees and houses
located
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are located
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 in the south-east part of the area. Another striking change was
construction
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the construction
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 of
big
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a big
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 supermarket which is in the north part of apartments and blocks of flats were considerably grew up in 2013. Another notable change was
extension
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an extension
the extension
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 of
railway
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the railway
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 along the coastline.
Furthermore
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, the sea had been some ferry which used for
transportation
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the transportation
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 of cars.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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