International travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country that they visited. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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international travel had been offering leisure time and relaxation.there are positive and negative impacts on both travellers and destinations.
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, I believe the benefits of international travel outweigh the drawbacks. there are two benefits side both visitor and country.
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, there are opportunities
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earn money due to the visitor boosts the economy.to elaborate,
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Thailand bought a financial ticket and booked the hotel.
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the other hand, it helps
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to offer their products to
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, knowledge is
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exchanged
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when you visit new
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. for ,example my cousin the flow to Qatar
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discovered new more
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and learned
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by interacting with
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, there are drawbacks
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foreign
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aslo
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, when visit a new place could
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shock culture for
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money
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each
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to spreading the diseases . to illustrate, the current coronavirus pandemic is a classical example. to sum up,the pros and cons
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international travel
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various, in my
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the advantages
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the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchange
  • Exposure
  • Broadens horizons
  • Increases understanding
  • Promotes economic growth
  • Tourism
  • Educational opportunities
  • Personal development
  • Self-confidence
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon footprint
  • Disease transmission
  • Economic disparities
  • Cultural misunderstandings
  • Clashes
  • Security risks
  • Safety concerns
  • Balancing
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
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