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The two maps below show road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. To summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. To summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the development of the
road
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 entrance to an urban hospital over two different time periods (2007 and 2010).
Overall
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, The facilities minimally changed from the previous year in order to comfort the customer by adding roundabouts, replacing a
bus
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 station with
bus
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 stops and separating the user car park. In 2006, the City hospital ,which was surrounded by a ring
road
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, had only one entrance that connected to the city
road
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. After three years, roundabouts were added to both conjunctions in a ring
road
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 and the city
road
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.
In addition
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, in 2007 Car park, which is for
customer
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customers
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 and staff,
located
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was located
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 on the right of Hospital
Road
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.
However
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, It was separated into 2 places in order to unconnected staff and customers in 2010. Staff parked at the same as the previous location
while
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 the public
parking
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parked
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 at the new building on the East of the hospital.
Furthermore
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,
Bus
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 stops were replaced by a
bus
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 station that connected to both roundabouts in 2010.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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