The two maps below show road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. To summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the development of the
road
entrance to an urban hospital over two different time periods (2007 and 2010).
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Overall
, The facilities minimally changed from the previous year in order to comfort the customer by adding roundabouts, replacing a Linking Words
bus
station with Use synonyms
bus
stops and separating the user car park.
In 2006, the City hospital ,which was surrounded by a ring Use synonyms
road
, had only one entrance that connected to the city Use synonyms
road
. After three years, roundabouts were added to both conjunctions in a ring Use synonyms
road
and the city Use synonyms
road
.
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In addition
, in 2007 Car park, which is for Linking Words
customer
and staff, Fix the agreement mistake
customers
located
on the right of Hospital Add a missing verb
was located
Road
. Use synonyms
However
, It was separated into 2 places in order to unconnected staff and customers in 2010. Staff parked at the same as the previous location Linking Words
while
the public Linking Words
parking
at the new building on the East of the hospital. Replace the word
parked
Furthermore
, Linking Words
Bus
stops were replaced by a Use synonyms
bus
station that connected to both roundabouts in 2010.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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