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Obesity is an increasing public health problem in some parts of the world. Explain some possible reasons for this problem and suggest some solutions.

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Nowadays, obesity has become the most outstanding issue around the world mostly due to lack of exercise and not having a healthy diet.
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, gaining an active
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 and adapting to eat healthy
foods
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 can prevent
people
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 from being overweight. In
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 modern world, the individual's working environment has changed especially during the pandemic. Some
people
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 work from home which leads them to a sedentary
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. They are busy doing their business that they do not have enough time for their personal development. In
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 case, lacking physical movements can have excess weight. Another reason to gain extra weight could be because of eating unhealthy
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 as junk
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, cooking a healthy, delicious meal at home becomes impossible for those who are busy and they start eating fast
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 that contain more calories which can cause corpulence. To halt the state of being grossly fat, some pragmatic changes in
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 should be made. Doctors suggest that exercise is the best way to keep
people
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 fit. By doing exercise just one hour per day at home or gym, we will be able to improve our daily
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 remarkably. Another step to decrease obesity could be to eat nutritious
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 of ready-made
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.
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, it is proved that the digestive system works better when we eat vegetables or fresh fruits, which is good for our health and helps us to get fit. To conclude, the increasing problem of obesity is responsible for individuals all over the world. To reduce
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 issue,
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 should stick to their normal healthy diet and start a habit of doing some physical exercises regularly.
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