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plastic bags ,plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. what damage does plastic do to the environment?what can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #governments #individuals
The public
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Public
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 concern has risen about the enormous
plastic
 products that have caused the demerit impact
to
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on
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 the
natual
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natural
 environment.
This
 issue has attracted not only environmentalist attraction, government level
is evaluate
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this
 imminent issue.
This
 article is going to elaborate effects
toward to
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of
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 our circumstances and discuss how people can do to improve
this
 problem in both governmental and citizen aspects. Individuals have found that
plastic
 waste is generated from daily life, including
plastic
bowl
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bowls
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,
plastic
 packages and
plastic
 toothbrushes. As all the
plastic
 material can not be decomposed naturally, there are more and more indecomposable garbage is attacking the plant. Several pictures have indicated the beach are full of trash and even sea turtle ate them accidentally. Even worse, one of the sea turtles'
head
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heads
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even
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 stuck and tightened by the
plastic
 cup holder which made some eruptions
at
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in
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neck
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 area.
Therefore
, each human is taking steps on reducing the not eco-friendly product and
develop
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developing
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 new
material
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materials
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 to replace
plastic
. At
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national
natoinal
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the natoinal
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 level, governments are negotiating new laws to protect the natural zone and restrict the usage of
the
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plastic
 material in products.
For example
, tolls will be fine for throwing
the
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plastic
 trash in the forests.
Also
, new laws ruled shops that
plastic
 bags are not allowed to provide to customers. People are used to
bring
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 their
plastic
 bags for shopping. Even better, bringing their own tableware is a new trend in the young generation.
On the other hand
, electrical devices used a bunch of
plastic
 materials to replace the
high cost
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 ones. With the eco-protecting law and the advanced technology of the
plastic
 material can be chosen. The usage of
the
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plastic
 in
industry
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the industry
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situation
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situations
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 will be improved. In conclusion, the
plastic
 waste problems acquire not only the government's resolution but
also
 every people's environmental awareness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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