Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion.

Over the
last
two or three decades, electronic idems' sales ratio has been raising more tremendously, especially in mobiles and laptops than ever before due to the invention of technology.
As a result
, some mankind is addicted to buying these
products
enormously.
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I partially agree with
this
statement and that essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with, buying new gadgets continuously by affectionate about that particular items can provide
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plenty of benefits. Mankind can be used
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updated version features when they buy a new brand, so they improve their technological skills. At present, these
products
have all
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features it contains, so humankind has a chance to know about
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.
For example
, in western countries, people always change their mobiles when a new model comes
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the market.
Then
numerous humankind is fond of purchasing these
products
for their interests.
On the other hand
, these can lead to spending more
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buying new models continuously,
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is less than spending money on that.
In addition
, these kinds of
products
need for communicating, but today's mankind has become materialistic which means they
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to buying a new brand and model.
For instance
, a recent report by the Times of India said that more than 60% of the Indians are being addicted to buying new mobiles and laptops as well as spending
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money
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on that.
Then
people are fond of purchasing these goods are negative things. To conclude, when all things
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, I am convinced that these both have some positives as well as negatives
such
as knowing updated technical skills is the positives; being
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and spending huge money is the negatives.
Hence
, I partially agree with that statement and I believe that humankind should have innumerable awarenesses about the materialistic.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • productivity
  • status symbol
  • financial burden
  • obsession
  • impulsive
  • consumerism
  • sustainability
  • e-waste
  • environmentally friendly
  • second-hand market
  • repairability
  • upgradability
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