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Some people believe that secondary or high school students should be taught how to use money management as an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree

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Money
management
 is the greatest
life
 skill and it should be taught to everyone but when to start teaching
this
 is the question of debate among people.some come up with delivering that education of finance to secondary or high school
students
 and I agree with the idea and discuss
further
 that in the
next
 paragraphs. There are a number of
life
 surviving skills and one of the most important is to manage the funds.So,it is vital to educate the
students
 with
this
 at the earliest possible opportunities as the sooner they learn the better the understanding and practice of it which make
students
 perfect at the level of university in managing
money
.In some ,countries parents start teaching their children about
money
 when they start giving them pocket
money
 and teach them the value of
money
 and how to handle it which makes them better financial advisors and managers in future. Without
this
 ,skill one can not do well with regard to
money
 and despite good earnings ,they remain in debt and lack
money
 for emergency needs like illness or accidents.
Therefore
 the early introduction of financial
management
 and giving good practice of the wealth
management
 as well as trends in the currency will make them better in the economy. Good financial control gives peace of mind and people do better in their personal and social
life
 with stability in the monetary sense. In conclusion,
money
management
 is an essential part of
life
,
students
 who start achieving and absorbing it earlier provide them with a better future as they can do well with whatever income they have by good
management
.
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