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You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another company Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - Say how your work could be done while you are away - Ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr .Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that my intention is to
work
 in our head office in London for the
next
 six months. Recently, our company has decided to upgrade our computer security
system
 as a precaution against possible hacking. The
system
 upgrade is a highly technical task, and I need to get some exposure to
this
system
 where it's currently implemented. Our head office has experienced a cyberattack, two months ago and they have acted promptly to design a customized cyber security
system
 to prevent possible future threats to the
system
. I have to
work
 with
this
system
 practically
,
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 and need to get familiarized within
this
 time period. During my absence, John will be the team leader of the IT division, and I have shared all the related documents, Passwords, and future
work
 plans with him. I am confident that he will be able to manage my duties during
this
 period. So, I would like to request from you to make arrangements to prepare relevant documents and get permission from higher management to
work
 in the head office. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, Mac
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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