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These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?

#fathers #home #care #children #mothers #work #development
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It is true that there are becoming more and more housefathers to take
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 of
children
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 while mothers bring home the bacon. In my opinion, I believe that
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 way has both pros and cons. The main reason that results in
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 phenomenon is the progress of the world. It is because the public broke their stereotype, which is mothers should look after
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 and
fathers
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 should earn money.
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,
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 and mothers can change their roles in recent life.
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, there are more women having the ability to get a high salaried job to support their family.
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, a female CEO whose salary or income is enough to raise a family. In
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 case,
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 woman’s partner does not need to have his own income
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 he can take
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 of their
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 at home. The outcomes of
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 taking
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 of their
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 have both advantages and disadvantages. One of the benefits is women can maintain their social positions and keep improving themselves. For men, they can teach their
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 some skills that female people seldom do well.
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, the disadvantage of
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 taking
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 of their
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 is some details
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 may not
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 about.
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, it is essential to keep the environment clean or without dust. Because
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 always eat their toys and climb on the ground. If
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 have not noticed
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, it will make their
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 get sick easily. In conclusion, in my opinion, I am on the fence.
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 is because I believe that no matter who takes
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 of their
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, he or she will try their best to give them a comprehensive love.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breadwinner
  • caregiving
  • paternal leave
  • societal perceptions
  • gender roles
  • flexible working conditions
  • personal preference
  • father-child relationship
  • emotional and social development
  • household responsibilities
  • career opportunities
  • professional achievements
  • balanced parenting
  • earning potential
  • social stigma
  • societal pressure
  • discrimination
  • traditional mindsets
  • resentment
  • adjustment
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