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The older generations tend to have traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that the older generations mostly adhere to the traditional values which are not inconsistent with younger generations. While I agree that some traditional ideas are old-fashioned, I believe that some of them are still beneficial to young
people
's lifestyles. On the one hand, many ideas that older
people
 still find unavoidable are no longer accepted by younger
people
.
For instance
, in the past,
people
 believed in bringing up a boy or a girl to become a breadwinner and a good housewife.
Moreover
, they were encouraged to choose a career and find a stable job for life.
However
, these beliefs are not appliable for the contemporary age where
people
 believe in gender equality.
In addition
, young adults nowadays select their profession, life partner and decide when to marry, which contracts the old view.
On the other hand
, some traditional viewpoints are still useful that
people
 at a young age should foster.
For example
, in today's world, young adults have to communicate or work with different
people
 from a huge variety of backgrounds and it is essential to treat others with respect and good manners. Ancestors strongly believe in the importance of being honest, polite and working hard. These characteristics need to be passed to the new generation because they may be helpful to establish a better family, social life, cultural bonding, and work environment. I
also
 believe that teenagers would be happier if they had our forefathers' sense of community. In conclusion,
although
 old ideas seem to be incompatible with younger generations, not all views should be dismissed as irrelevant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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