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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT ALLOWING CHILDREN TO MAKE THEIR OWN DECISION ON EVERYDAY MATTERS IS LIKELY TO RESULT IN A SOCIETY OF INDIVIDUALS WHO ONLY THINK ABOUT THEIR OWN WISHES. OTHER PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT IT IS IMPORTANT FOR CHILDREN TO MAKE DECISION ABOUT MATTERS THAT AFFECT THEM. DISCUSS BOTH OPINIONS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION

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In
this
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 present-day world, it has to be said that,
children
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 may become self-centred in future if
parents
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 allow them to take
decisions
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 by themselves on their
choices
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.
On the contrary
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, some people assume that adolescents have to take their
decisions
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 in some stance to become stalwarts ,
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, they are not mature enough. Ithink that,no
parents
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 never like to ruin their kids'
life
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 or later hurt them;and
parents
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 have the responsibility to help their offspring to make the right
decisions
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 on their
choices
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: food, clothes and entertainment; as well as
children
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 should obey their
parents
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 for a fruitful future.
This
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 essay will enunciate both notions in detail with appropriate examples. To commence with, it is indeed an irrefutable fact that
parents
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 ought to take
decisions
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 on
children
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's
choices
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instead
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 of accepting their
decisions
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 on their
choices
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; because they are not mature enough to take right decision by themselves; and they are tender and childish during their adolescence period.In brief,
children
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 do not have critical thinking ,congnitive and time management
skills
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; and the only way to learn these
skills
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 by the help of their
parents
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.
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, offspring do not have any idea about what is good and what is wrong in their childhood.To cite an example, a study was conducted by scholars in AIIMS Institute, Delhi about the offspring's brain
development
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 during their younger age:
development
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 of critical thinking, time management and congnitive
skills
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 and how parental support help them in
this
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 change. The result shows about 80% of
children
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 are learned the aforesaid
skills
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 with the help of their
parents
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 during their brain
development
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 stage.
On the contrary
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, it is paramount to consider
children
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's
decisions
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 in some viewpoint;
otherwise
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 adolescents may become dubious to make clarity as well as gain self confidence in their future.It is imperative to allow them to say their likes and dislikes from their smaller age to cultivate a ability to understand what is right and wrong in their
life
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; if their
parents
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 interfere in every situation may lead to make their offsprings selfish and off social; it is likely to become pave the way for immoral
life
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; as well as they may loose their empathy and sympathy towards other people.
For instance
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, a recent study was conducted by Toronto University about how to gain self confidence from childhood?.The result shows nearly 88% of people with self confidence only because of their
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' support and interference.In the light of
this
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 study pedeatric doctors in Indian has been started to counselling
parents
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 about the importance of their help in
children
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's
development
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. In conclusion , it is amply clear that no
parents
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 never like to hurt their heir; and scion should obey their
parents
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 to improve their congnitive,
life
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 management and critical thinking abilities . At the same pace
parents
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 allow offspring to make settlement some stance
also
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 help them to improve aforesaid
skills
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.
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