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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living What is your opinion abbout this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in ?

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The Matter at hand concerns there is certain individuals who assume that today's modern
life
 is better than ancient .After adequate ,
thought
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 I would like to say that I support
to
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this
 statement we are in a new era ,where
life
 has become more practical and easier .In support of the above ,what follows is a detailed explanation .
To begin
 with ,now a day's the new technology have made a drastic change in the world
such
 as transport system and
man
 has developed his lifestyle and resources ,
hence
 we all are living secured
life
 socially ,economically .To
st
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 the ball rolling
man
 has created an advanced technology
such
 as computer ,here is an example to corroborate my stance ,one computer has a capacity of thousand people work capacity and
second
 example one machine is equivalent to 10 people . To drive home my reasoning ,I am very interested in the stone age ,we all have learned in
the
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history that human was in the prehistoric culture stage ,where there was no rule of
life
 the following case will be substantially above ,in that era people were
able
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 migrated from one place to another
however
 now it has changed we need liaisons ,we need a certificate .,
Furthermore
 in that period
man
 has started making tools from the stone he discovered the fire . taking into consideration what has been written before it is clear that humans need development ,
man
 has discovered many things since the early stone age and that process will be sustained.
hence
 I agree with those who claimed that living in today's world is the best time .
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