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Successful people try new things and takes new risks rather than only doing what they know how do well. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
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 two or three decades, mankind's risk habits have been raising more tremendously than ever before.
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, an
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achievable
 humankind always tries new
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 and likes to take peril in their
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instead
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 of doing the same thing which they know very well. I partially agree with
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 statement and
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 essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. To commence with, being successful humankind likes to take risk in their
lives
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 as well as tries new
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 due to they do not like to do the same
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 in their day to day life and they want some adventure, so they try aforementioned.
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, these kinds of
sucessful
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successful
 persons are being role
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 for the population where their surroundings,
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 they have to do any new
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 for their fans or supporters.
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, Elon Musk, a successful
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 magnet across the world,
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always tries new
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 like new
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,
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although
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 he has numerous
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business
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businesses
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.
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, successful people always like to try new
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 and take
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a risk
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risk
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risks
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 too rather than doing
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us
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usual
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.
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, trying new
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 and taking risks might be provided
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a
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plenty of negative
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consequences who are the achievers.
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,
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routine lifestyle gives
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 peaceful lifestyle, so humankind can be lived without facing any difficulties,
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, they can stay away from
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dangerous situations.
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, Indians never like to try new
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such
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 as new work,
business
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 because they have innumerable
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fears
fearless
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, so Indians do the same
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 in their
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, trying a new thing might be provided more consequences. To conclude, when all
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 considered, I am convinced that these both have positives and negatives, so, I partially agree with the aforementioned details. I believe that people can be tried new
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 when they have more
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confidence
confidents
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