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One of the major problems that faces today’s governments is creating enough satisfactory housing for their populations whilst still trying to protect the environment. Discuss this statement & give your opinion now.

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In the contemporary epoch, it has been challenging for the administration to develop adequate residential areas by preserving nature in parallel. As per my preposition, the
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 is significant and has to address.
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 and foremost, beyond doubt, the Human right to have a residential area is undeniable ,
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, authorities have to fulfil the need for housing for each individual by any means,
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; authorities have faced many difficulties in providing land to the community without doing any harm to surroundings. To quote an instance, deforestation has been made the repercussions of providing houses to growing population which
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 causes species to be extinct.
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, deforestation affects animal and plant species the most due to their loss of habitat. Apart from
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 , illiteracy is another factor that leads to population explosion and ultimately rising demand for housing. As illiterate people do not understand the benefits of nuclear families so they Contribute to increasing the birth rate. The
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 is insurmountable,
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 by taking proper action
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 can be curbed so the predominant solution is making people aware of the pros of nuclear families so that the increasing rate of the population can be controlled.
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 , increasing the height of the building will
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 be an appropriate solution . As it will fulfil both the purpose of providing houses to most of the people along with by consuming less land area. To Conclude, protecting nature is imperative for inhabitants’ survival
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 the government is trying to fulfil the basic requirements of a growing society each individual should support solving
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 by joining hands with authorities.
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