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Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems.

#pollution #countries
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it is true that related to
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environmental pollution
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 become one of the serious threat and controversial issue across the world. Numerous nations are tried to address these troubles. The government and the population
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 together to solve that problem and
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 commence with, humankind bears to contribute
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 protecting our mother nature in many ways.
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, parents and teachers should be taught about how to protect our environment and what are the consequences we are faced at present about that to the upcoming generations.
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 they can teach about recycling and reproducing to their children.
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, in India parents and tutors are taught about the environmental pollution to their offsprings, so the following generations have the chance to know about all these problems since childhood period.
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, mankind would be used the public transport rather than using
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private cars and can be walked a short distance.
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, the authority can be done in various ways to tackle that problem.
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, by making public transportation more convenient to encourage people
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 them.
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, through
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 and media, creating
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awareness about the
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importance
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 of the environment.
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, in the UK, there is a campaign called the British Tidy, their people can
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contribute
 to clean their environment with interest.
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, the authority should provide the laws for reducing
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deforesttsion
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deforestation
 across the world. These are the main ways to tackle that trouble. To conclude, using public transport and trying recycling and reproducing is the public can be done for that trouble. The authority should provide a strict law for deforestation, creating
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awareness by media and
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campaigns
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. The population and the government can be
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joined
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 together to solve the aforementioned problem.
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