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Some people believe that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others believe that it is getting easier. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #cities
Nowadays, more than
a
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half of people live in
cities
. Some of them believe
life
 in metropolitan is quite easy.
Other
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Others
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 suppose that living in big
cities
 is becoming more difficult every day.
This
 essay agrees that
,
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 living in megapolitan is easier, than in
villages
. On one hand, urban living is easier, than country
life
.
In addition
, big
cities
has
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 high medicine level, in
villages
 the level of medicine is much lower. There are many more hospitals and qualified doctors in metropolitan areas. One more
pros
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pro
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 for
cities
 is
high
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a high
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 level of salaries and income.
Moreover
, in any big
city
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 there is career growth. In my viewpoint,
life
 in
cities
 is better, than in
villages
, because in metropolitan everyone could have career growth and wonderful
life
.
On the other hand
,
life
 in urban areas has some disadvantages.
Also
,
cost
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 of
life
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 in
cities
 is much more, than in small towns or
villages
.
Moreover
, in many
cities
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,cities
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 there are not enough leafy suburbs, which worsens the ecology of the city.
Besides
, in the
villages
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,villages
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 it is possible to grow food, that improves the quality of food. In my opinion,
life
 in
cities
 is easier, than in
villages
. There are a lot of problems
of
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 country
life
.
However
, in
cities
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,cities
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 there are some troubles too, but
them
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they
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 are gradually corrected by
government
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the government
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. At all, the pros of living in a big city outweigh the cons, but small towns and
villages
 remain desirable places to live.
Life
 in big
cities
 become easier each day, but it still has difficulties.
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