In many countries, the age of criminals is getting lower. Give reasons and solutions to the problem. Support your position with relevant example.

Nowadays there is a growing concern over the criminal age. The age of
first
crime of youngsters has been decreasing over past years. A great number of rationals are being discussed by experts. I will discuss two of these reasons in
this
essay which are proceeding by solutions.
First
, the financial issue has always been viewed as the most obvious reason behind crimes. The world's
economy
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downfall not only resulted in financial difficulties but
also
increased the prevalence of unemployment.
Hence
more young adults have lost their jobs, more percentage of them have
commited
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committed
crime
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crimes
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for
living
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a living
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. To illustrate, more than 25
percent
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per cent
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of young adults have laid off
last
year due to
Covid
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the Covid
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pandemic and its economical consequences without having enough savings . I believe that the government are playing an increasingly important role in solving
this
issue.
This
phenomenon would not be solved unless
country's
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administrations financially supported the young population.
Second
, the role of social media in
destributing
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distributing
criminal activities is out of the question.
Considrebale
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Considerable
crimes are being advertised on different platforms.
For example
, some criminal groups have enticed a lot of youngsters
last
year.
Although
freedom
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to access all of the online content might be preferable to being limited, it suffers from disadvantages that put our children
in
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the
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risk of being in touch with dangerous organizations. Protecting our offspring from being involved in illegal activities will be plausible if we have
a
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strict supervision over the internet's contents.
This
solution might
seems
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feasible for the government but a lot of protests have been held against it that have made it difficult. To sum up, the younger generation is involving themselves in illegal activities in comparison with the past.
This
problem is rooted in the world economical downfall and their unlimited access to dangerous
contents
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content
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on the internet. I believe the former reason can be solved by
the
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governmental support and the latter one needs our own consideration and supervision over the internet's contents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • juvenile delinquency
  • influence
  • parental supervision
  • social inequality
  • propel
  • comprehensive strategies
  • family values
  • moral and social values
  • government policies
  • disparities
  • regulating
  • depiction
  • at-risk youth
  • mentors
  • inclusive education systems
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