Some people believe that having a conversation on a mobile phone in a public or crowded place should be banned. Others feel that we should be able to talk wherever we like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

We live in a world where
communication
opportunities are developing rapidly, which allows
people
to get in touch anywhere at any time. Still, some believe that restrictions are necessary
in
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communicating via phones in common and filled
places
. The opposite side is more confident that they have the right to use
such
possibilities at will. Taking into account that each position has its own justifications, I’m more inclined that by avoiding strict restrictions and observing the basic rules of
communication
in public
places
, it is possible to create conditions that satisfy both groups.
Firstly
, it’s necessary to clearly distinguish in which
places
it is undesirable to talk on a mobile
phone
for objective reasons, since the life and/or health of other
people
may depend on it.
Such
places
include
airplanes
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, hospitals, where telephone
communication
can affect the operation of equipment, or a
conversation
while driving a motor vehicle. Another important component that directly affects each person is noise and discomfort that can be inflicted on others when talking in already crowded
places
. Indeed, it greatly affects the psychological state of those
people
who are forced to listen to a
conversation
that has nothing to do with them. On
the
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hand, it is logical to think that if someone has the right not to violate his personal boundaries,
then
this
rule
also
applies to the opposite side. So, there are very serious and decisive moments in life when it’s really important to talk here and now, in which cases there is no other way out how to use mobile
communication
.
Besides
, in public
places
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people
talk not only on their cell phones
,
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but
also
among themselves, which is quite the same as the case with the
phone
. All those risks and troubles that can be brought to society can
also
be brought
in
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a normal
conversation
.
This
should pay attention not to the prohibition of
communication
by
phone
, but more to the ethics of
conversation
in any form. Concluding, all of the above, we see that phones have settled firmly in our
life
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and in many ways make it easier. At the same time , taking into account the harm and inconvenience caused when talking in public
places
and crowded rooms, it is necessary to clearly understand how appropriate and necessary it is to talk in a particular place.
However
, it is not necessary to categorically prohibit talking on the
phone
, it is enough to share opinions about the generally permitted rules of etiquette.
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