Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over- enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think the role of a parent should be in their child's education?

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We know that every people need encouragement during their life ,especially academy years. But some
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a negative effect on their
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think that putting too much strength on their
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a bit support and encouragement at their academy and discipline. If offspring can not take attention to their
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a strict attitude from their
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offspring. So it belongs to
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In conclusion, I think that in training every parent
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a great role for their
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should give support not burden to their
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we should focus on our
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when they study at school.
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