Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over- enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think the role of a parent should be in their child's education?

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a negative effect on their

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. Most

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think that putting too much strength on their

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.But I think that it is not the correct idea. Because

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a bit support and encouragement at their academy and discipline. If offspring can not take attention to their

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may impact their studies. Absolutely, we can say

heir

's schooling and

behaviour

depend on parent's attitude to their offspring. Our encouragement gives our

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confidence.

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they can reach their aims. On the other side, some offspring need strength. Because their family atmosphere requires

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a strict attitude from their

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and studies.

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bad

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offspring. So it belongs to

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In conclusion, I think that in training every parent

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a great role for their

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. Because

parents

should give support not burden to their

children

when they need help. In

this

,way we can gain our intention by seeing our

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we should focus on our

children

when they study at school.

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