In many countries nowadays, young single people no longer stay with their parents until they are married, but leave to study or work somewhere else. Do you think this trend has more advantages or disadvantages?

Nowadays,
people
leaving homes at an early age - is quite in a vogue. Some
people
consider that staying away from home
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young age either to study or for work has more advantages than disadvantages. In my opinion, leaving parents behind and moving apart has many drawbacks than benefits. Today, the world has become more competitive than before. With the growing advancements and modernization, lust for power, money, better lifestyle has
also
increased a lot. Young
people
always try to cope
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with
this
fast moving
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world.
Hence
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their
desires
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they move away from parents and home at an early age either to study
further
or in search
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better jobs. I admit that
this
is essential, as it provides exposure, increases job perspective, better salary, modern lifestyle and so on, but there are disadvantages as well. These are as follows:
First
of all, youngsters when they move out, they are totally unaware of the world and its challenges. They
initially
feel isolated and sometimes feel homesick.
This
can lead to depression if they don't find a way to get rid of it.
For example
, a student may find it difficult to stay alone after he/she has stayed with the family for a long time.
Secondly
, problems of accommodation may arise as moving to a new place and finding a proper room to live
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quite a tedious job. At
this
point
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time,
people
may get frustrated and cannot concentrate on the goal that they have been here to achieve.
Lastly
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most common problem that many
people
face is self-satisfaction. If they find themselves not satisfied, they tend to indulge in activities that are not acceptable to
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society.
For example
, salary and promotion issues compel workers to commit crimes
such
as theft, robbery etc. To conclude, for all the above-mentioned points, it is essential for the parents to be with their children to support them, encourage them to move
further
and above all provide them with love and care.
Therefore
, in my view, though there are some advantages of leaving homes early
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disadvantages are far more than that.
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