In some cultures, the old age is more valued, while in some cultures the youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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was two discuss old team and youth team. West states more valued old
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east states. The
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more
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and smart because It was born a long time ago. The
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age
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respect for
people
, for older
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, for parents, and for
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, I think
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old
age
cultures
must
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. Nowadays,
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capitalism is more valued
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cultures
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old culture. Now Everybody
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think
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very fast smart than
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century. So in
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people
prefer youth culture.
Everyday
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born
a new music
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new music
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, new trend, new words and e.t.c. All things depend on young
people
. because they make a Global new culture. and they
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higher than
old. In my opinion,
in
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every person has to take on soul. Who wants to
valued
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the old
age
cultures
they must
should
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on
this
road.
also
backwards.
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