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With the rapid advancement of communication technology: smart phones, tablets and other mobile devices, some people believe that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There are tremendous
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controversial
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 heating up a debate over the pros and cons of the development
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technology
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of technology
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 . While some hold a strong view that it brings a negative effect on
people
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, the opposite makes a statement that it has a tremendous benefit for their life. While each has its own merits, I would contend that it is optimal to combine both mentioned elements. Without a shadow of a doubt, there are a wealth of drawbacks that have an immense influence on humans, one of them being
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 distance between relationships. In
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 day and age,
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 who have prolonged exposure to a smartphone and the Internet will be predisposed not to interact with anyone in real life.
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, in VietNam, there is an issue called smartphone addiction which refers to
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 who always stick to their phones at home and
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 immersed in their world. They do not even have the demand for talking with an intimate members’ family.
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,
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 why smartphones and the Internet are regarded as a factor in family’s relationship alienation. While the disadvantages of
technology
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 are widely acknowledged, it is unfair if those redeeming features of using mobile advice are ignored. Nowadays, because of the rapid development of top-notch
technology
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,
people
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 can make use of it for a wide range of purposes, to be specific, the contact.
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, everyone can connect with other
people
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 in different locations by a great many applications, which are available and free on their phones
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 as Facebook, Instagram or Snapchat.
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 helps them save more time and money
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 to the particular venue.
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, it plays a paramount imperative role in enhancing
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humans
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. To summarize, despite having a negative impact on society, the advancement of
technology
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 is of necessity for humans to have a convenient and comfortable life.

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