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Some people think that a car is the best way to travel in city while other believe a bicycle is a better way. Discuss both both view and give your opinion.

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In present time vehicle is the most important element to move
one
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 to
other
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another
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. Some
people
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 believe that automobile is
better
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a better
the better
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 way to travel in cities where is
other
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others
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 think that travel by
bicycle
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 is
best
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the best
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 way to transport. In my view, I completely agree with the latter view.
This
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further
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elaborated
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both
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on both
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positive
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the positive
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 and negative
effect
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effects
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 of
this
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 trend anthers will lead to
logical
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a logical
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 conclusion.
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 with, these are some advantages to
travel
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travelling
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 by
a
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car in
urban
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an urban
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 area.
First
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, using ka is helped
people
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 to save time ,
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instead
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ofinstead
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 using
two
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two-wheeler
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wheeler
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wheelers
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. Driving
automobile
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an automobile
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 is
also
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 not a physically
stranuous
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strenuous
 actively but it
help
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helps
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people
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 to save time and energy.
Example
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 one of my
relative
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relatives
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 lives far from me, about 10 km, It will take 1 to 2 hours
two wheeler
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two-wheeler
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 when I go there, but if I
use
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car
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a car
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insted
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instead
 I can reach there approximately 30
minute
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minutes
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.
Moverover
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Moreover
 another
advantages
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advantage
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 is that protect
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the environment
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environment
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environmental
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 condition .mostly
in
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of
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rainy
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the rainy
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 season
people
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 prefer to
use
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car
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the car
a car
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. Alternatively, fue individual
like
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likes
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 to
use
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bicycle
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a bicycle
the bicycle
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. The reason
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is
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are as
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areas
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. The
use
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 of
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 is
the
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apply
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beneficial
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benefit
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 for our health and environment.
this
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 is because
,
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 It can need human strength and requires no gasoline and petrol.
Although
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, no
use
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 of harmful emission is released
to
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into
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air
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the air
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.
Secondly
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, in process of riding ,
human
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humans
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 burn out excess fat and
also
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 release toxic to
to
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our bodies. Because of these control cities
people
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 fitness and healthier.
For instance
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,
study
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the study
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 showed that
,
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apply
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daily
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a daily
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30 minute
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30-minute
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 cycle ride can mitigate the risk of hypertension,
dieabetesh
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diabetes
 , and bad
liqui
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liquid
desorbans
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desorbs
 . In Conclusion,
tyre
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the tyre
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 is the fastest mode
to
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of
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 transportation to
use
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 in
city
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the city
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.
Bicycle
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 is the best choice to favourable weather condition and which as the economically efficient and can
also
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 save
lot
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a lot
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 of money .
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