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Some people think that museums and art galleries should concentrate on the works of their own countries instead of the work of art from other parts of the world. To what extent​ do you agree or disagree?

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Museums
 play an important role to present cultural diversity, historical backgrounds and etc. among individuals and countries. Some group of society believes that
museums
 and galleries ought to focus on local exhibits rather than evidence from the rest of the world. I agree that
museums
 should give priority to local artefacts,
however
, famous and unique objects from other countries should be included in their exhibition list. To commence with, there are several benefits of
museums
 and art galleries in terms of educational and cultural development of notions.
Museums
 enable great opportunity for students to obtain precious information about the country from the traditional, cultural and historical perspectives which, have
positive
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 impact on
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the patriotism
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 feelings of individuals.
For example
, by providing detailed information and antique exhibits,
museums
 give amazing experiences for people to imagine historical events.
On the other hand
,
museums
 should give a chance to gain broad information about
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other countries and cultures. It is fact that borders are going to disappear between states.
World
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The world
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 have globalised, nations
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are
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ara
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are
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 becoming closer. In
this
situations
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 cultural
differencies
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differences
,
Thus
, the demonstrating of the local artefacts in the
museums
 play a significant role in a public
aweraness
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awareness
 about country values and, protect them for the future generation. ,
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