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Studying the English language in an English-speaking country is the best but not the only way to learn language. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#english #language #country
English
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language
is consider
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as
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apply
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the
world
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world's
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 easiest
language
. But for some people, who are not born as the
english
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 being their mother tongue, it is not as simple as it
seem
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. Not because of its easy 26 alphabets, but because of the
time
 and
money
 that we have to invest
on
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in
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 it.
Thus
, I strongly agreed
to
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 the statement that studying the
English
language
 in an
English
-speaking country is the best
although
one
 can choose to learn in other ways.
One
 of the advantages of studying in
English
-speaking
countries
such
 as Australia, America, England, etc , is that
its
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it's
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 cheaper than
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compared
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 to
non
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non-English-speaking
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English
-speaking
countries
such
 as
Asia
. If
one
want
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wants
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 to study
the
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apply
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english
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 with native speakers in
Asia
, they have to attend international school or classes that are owned by native speakers, whose fees are way beyond expensive. For an ordinary man in
Asia
, to work and pay for international school fees is impossible. But still,
majority
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 of
children
 from
upper-class
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the upper-class
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 and
few
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a few
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 amount of middle-class, attend international schools in
Asia
. While, in those western
countries
, if
one man
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work
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, even an entry-level job, he can afford a native speaker's
english
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 class for his
children
. Not only
its
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it's
it is
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 helpful financially, but
also
 save
times
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time
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 and help
children
 learn faster. As it is
English
-speaking
countries
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country
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of the
time
,
children
 will hear the
english
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English
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language
 and tend to speak it
wihtout
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without
 knowing that they did. In fact,
scientist
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scientists
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 have proven
this
 psychological fact.
For example
, when students in
Asia
 are attending listening classes and speaking
class
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classes
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 which cost them a huge amount of
money
, people in
English
-speaking
country
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countries
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 will be attending
it
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them
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 for free.
Therefore
, it
save
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saves
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 both
money
 and
time
.
Eventhough
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Even though
, learning
English
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the English
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language
 in
English-speaking
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an English-speaking
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 country is not the only way to learn
language
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the language
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 but it is the best and most effective way to study it. It not only save
money
 but
also
time
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersion
  • fluency
  • advanced
  • communicate
  • accommodate
  • exposure
  • cultural understanding
  • native speakers
  • educational institutions
  • resources
  • diverse
  • globalized
  • interact
  • self-study
  • online courses
  • tutors
  • language exchange
  • books
  • videos
  • podcasts
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • conversation partners
  • progress
  • motivated
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