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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

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Social networking seems to be fashionable among
communities
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 of all ages, even though sharing some vital
information
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 on these platforms could give rise to unfavourable circumstances.
However
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 , social networking has some positive factors like chances to know other nations' cultures and opportunities to
share
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information
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 with others.
Hence
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 ,
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 writer believes that the advantages of social media will be far away from its disadvantages. On one hand , some
people
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share
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 their vital personal
information
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 , with these social networks without thinking of its dangers. Unfortunately , some
information
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 like date of birth , contact details ,
information
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 about family and the favourite political party could be misused by some
people
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 or organisations leading to unnecessary troubles for the account holder.
For example
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 , some
people
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 try to contact these account holders for various purposes like promoting business.
However
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 , most social networks like Facebook , guarantee that the personal
information
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 of their customers will not
share
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 with
third
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 parties.
On the other hand
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, social networking is a golden platform to build a relationship with other
communities
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.
Furthermore
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 , it has given chance to
people
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 to
share
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 their thoughts and
information
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 with others and opportunities to learn the cultures of others .
For instance
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 , a recent survey conducted by one of the leading professors in Sri Lanka have said,
communities
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 have built a bond with each other due to social networking and compared to the
last
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 decade ,
people
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 are living much happier mostly due to
this
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 social networking . In conclusion ,
although
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 it can give rise to some bad effects , social networking seems to be popular in all ages of the
communities
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 and , it gives more positive things like flatform to
share
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 their thoughts and
information
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 with each other . Since these factors ,
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 writer believes that compare to its disadvantages , the advantages of social media will be far away.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social media platforms
  • Connectivity
  • Self-expression
  • Creativity
  • Global communication
  • Instantaneous communication
  • Personal growth
  • Career advancement
  • Privacy concerns
  • Identity theft
  • Cyberbullying
  • Addiction
  • Productivity
  • Misinformation
  • Crisis
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