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Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?

#people #computers #life
In
this
 modern world have changed a lot of things especially technology where we use a computer
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 work remotely or at the office and communication
to
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 people on the other side of the world. Some said that it could bring harm to people's lives but I strongly agree that the benefit of using technology which
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 easier for communication and collecting confidential data
outwieght
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outweigh
outweighed
 the apparent drawback from not using it.  The main reason that computer is an important part
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human
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being
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 is flexibility for business and even normal life. It produces more productivity for organizations because
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the worker
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worker
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 can communicate anytime at any place where
thay
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they
 can still be active.
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Furthermore
, a relationship whom they are being apart can still be connected. Another obvious benefit is
collection
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the collection
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 of
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unlimited
limited
 data for all future time.
For instance
, there
are
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the
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 system we call "Cloud", it could keep any data types
such
 as texts, files, videos and images with no limitation of space and it is confidential. In spite of these positive effects, there are apparent downsides
using
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a laptop
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laptop
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. They believe that working flexibility
lead
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 to mental and physical health, they
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therefore
 spend most of
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 time for work which cause constantly office syndrome.
In addition
, it is too complicated for people at
an older ages
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 to learn using new technologies. As our lifestyle has changed, it is hard to possibly access
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everything with no digital things.
Furthermore
, they could be committed fraud and theif by
stranger
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 easily.  To sum up, it is obvious that computer leads to
modern
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 lifestyle which is easy and fast for accessible. I personally agree that it
bring
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 more benefit to our lives.
This
 would reduce time management problems.
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