Some people say that computers have made life easier and more convenient. Other people say that computers have made life more complex and stressful. What is your opinion?

In
this
modern world have changed a lot of things especially technology where we use a computer
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work remotely or at the office and communication
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people on the other side of the world. Some said that it could bring harm to people's lives but I strongly agree that the benefit of using technology which
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easier for communication and collecting confidential data
outwieght
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outweigh
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the apparent drawback from not using it.  The main reason that computer is an important part
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human
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being
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is flexibility for business and even normal life. It produces more productivity for organizations because
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worker
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can communicate anytime at any place where
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they
can still be active.
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Furthermore
, a relationship whom they are being apart can still be connected. Another obvious benefit is
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of
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unlimited
limited
data for all future time.
For instance
, there
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system we call "Cloud", it could keep any data types
such
as texts, files, videos and images with no limitation of space and it is confidential. In spite of these positive effects, there are apparent downsides
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a laptop
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laptop
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. They believe that working flexibility
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to mental and physical health, they
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therefore
spend most of
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time for work which cause constantly office syndrome.
In addition
, it is too complicated for people at
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to learn using new technologies. As our lifestyle has changed, it is hard to possibly access
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everything with no digital things.
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, they could be committed fraud and theif by
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easily.  To sum up, it is obvious that computer leads to
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lifestyle which is easy and fast for accessible. I personally agree that it
bring
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more benefit to our lives.
This
would reduce time management problems.
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