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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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The world today is more connected than ever owing to globalization. With the ease of access to intercontinental travel or cooperation, many
students
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 are choosing to study abroad. Even though they bring many benefits for themselves and the
countries
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 involved, there are
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 some drawbacks at the same time.
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, it brings economic advantages to
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 abroad.
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, there may be a lot of things to support the
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 who have to live in the host
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. It may carry out economic activities,
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 as living places, daily necessities and different kinds of expenditures there.
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 benefits the local areas’ economy. For
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 themselves, studying abroad provides them with the subjects that they want.
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 as, studying to be a vet is tough in Hong Kong because the resources provided are insufficient.
Students
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 who want to become a vet in the future have to study in foreign
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.
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, international scholars may cause some adverse consequences for the
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 involved. An increasing number of international
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 means there may be a huge competition for domestic
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 in terms of degree relatively. Generally, the majority of scholars may decide to stay in the host
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 after graduating. The home
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 will
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 lose highly educated talents for certain sectors.
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, high technology.
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 might affect the development of the fields in the long term. In conclusion, studying abroad may bring advantages to
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 and
countries
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 like boosting economic and academic development.
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, it may cause loss of talents as well as field expansion. Overall, the benefits of international
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 do not outweigh their drawbacks.
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