Some people focus on news in their country while others think it is more important to be aware of international news. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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News

plays a huge role when it comes to a daily update for

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humans about the current situations. There

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two types of people who think watching local

news

is just enough, while others argue knowing an international issue

also

is parallelly important. Given my opinion here, there is nothing wrong to look at the other countries' situation which will help us to gain more knowledge and to make some plans in advance.

First

of all, international

news

gives some knowledge that we

cant

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find

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our local channels. Different cultures,

lifestyle

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and situations are can only come to

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once we start to watch

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outside

border's

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people.

Nonetheless

, reading or listening to outside

peoples

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news

will lead the individual to

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knowledgeable person than people who just watch the local

news

. Sometimes, with

this

knowladge

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knowledge

acknowledge

the particular person can perform well in an interview compared to the other type of person.

Secondly

, there are some outside

countries

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rules or

situation

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will

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be relatable to ours. By getting to know

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the other country's update

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first

-hand, we can prepare our plans here in advance. The most common thing that will always affect all countries is the fuel rate. In 2014 The main fuel supplier Arab had a major blust in their fuel tank.

this

makes many

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buy and store the petrol in advance by watching

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the

news

. The conclusion is

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since there is no limit to what we should watch or not, to be

upto

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up to

date is so much important and

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knowing something more than our country is an advantage for every individual.

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Some people focus on news in their country while others think it is more important to be aware of international news. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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