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Most people could not go to work in quarantine period and stayed at home due to the Covid-19 pandemic. What problems lockdown may arise, and how can these problems be tackled.

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First
 of all, the lockdown aims to prevent the spread of the
virus
. Yet, it
also
 caused several
problems
. Most developed
countries
 experience economic
problems
 because of
this
virus
. Even more in the developing
countries
 or the middle and lower-income
countries
 including my country. The developing country can not implement full lockdown because most of the
citizens
 have a daily wage, so if they can not go to work, they will not able to fulfil their daily needs.
Furthermore
, quarantine
also
 brings another problem. Almost all of the companies and schools
applied
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 work from home or study from home system. It looks easy and enjoyable since now the time is more flexible.
However
, in reality, it brings burnout to people since the work time is now no longer regular
likewise
. Students are
also
 given many tasks to do by their teacher. Mental health rise because of
this
 'from home' system. As well as the
problems
 above, because of Covid 19 pandemic, many companies experience failure and were forced to cut their employees.
Consequently
, many people are now unemployed and it brings other mental
problems
such
 as anxiety and depression. From the
first
 case of Covid 19,
countries
 all over the world trying to find the right regulation to prevent the spread of the
virus
 while maintaining their economic and
citizens
' wellbeing. Indonesian government now encourage the equal distribution of vaccines to its
citizens
. Certainly, the goal is to live side by side with the
virus
 without being scared anymore. I believe, many
countries
 still can not completely handle the
virus
. All they do is just try to coexist and restore their country's wellbeing. On the whole, every government only wants the best for its
citizens
,
although
 they are
also
 still guessing what can be done as
this
 is a completely new situation.

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