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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Currently, there is much discussion with regard to wave
food
. It is argued that nowadays has been an increase in fast
food
 which helped everyone save
time
.
Therefore
, the
advantages
 and disadvantages impacts of
this
 issue will be discussed in
this
 essay. Personally,despite the fact that
this
 trend has disadvantages . I am convinced that there are a greater number of
advantages
. On the one side of the argument, there are a number of benefits associated with
convenience
food
. The
first
 advantage is that safe the
time
.It means that everyone can do something rather than cooking which use many a process and the times.
For example
, when I was young my mother got up early in the morning for cooking to me and my father and she had to go to her office.
Moreover
,she prepared ingredients and goods for cooking in the morning every night before she went to bed.She did it for several years and her body was so weak because she was not enough slept.
Hence
,I and my father decided to cancel cooking in the morning
by
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my
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mother and bought
convenience
food
 rather than cooked by my mother.A
further
 benefit is that cooking takes
time
 with cook which has a lot of processes at least 1-2 hours .The people can use
this
time
 to read a book for development rather than cook. For
instead
, some people can read a book or search the internet for learning something to develop themselves. Thuring on the other side of the argument that impacts cannot be overlooked. Most people who
is
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 obese because of
convenience
food
.In fact,
convenience
food
 affects the body when having it is a lot. For the reasons mentioned above that there are a lot of
advantages
 but can not be overlooked the
advantages
 of
this
 issue. I would like to reiterate the
advantages
 of fast
food
 slightly outweigh the disadvantages because
convenience
food
 helps you save
time
 when rush
time
.
Nevertheless
, everyone has to be concerned about the disease from eating
convenience
food
 too much.
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