The growth of online shoppong will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that Numerous
of
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apply
people
prefer to buy on
online Change preposition
in
shops
for their convenient
. Replace the word
convenience
however
, I strongly disagree that every stores
will be closed in the future. There are two primary factors to support Change to a singular noun
store
this
perspective : consumers preference and inconvenient
for old generations.
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inconvenience
To begin
with, Vanity of customers prefer to buy on
visual Change preposition
in
store
rather than internet Fix the agreement mistake
stores
shops
. There are few
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a few
reason
why Change to a plural noun
reasons
people
like about
it. Change preposition
apply
This
is because lot
of consumers are not sure about their size, clothes colour and design. Individuals want to try their clothes, so they can figure out what they truly want. Change the article
a lot
Moreover
, websites have a limit that they are able to show
their products. Wrong verb form
showing
therefore
, buyer
make Fix the agreement mistake
buyers
wrong
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the wrong
decision
to purchase their items. Fix the agreement mistake
decisions
For example
, lot
of Correct article usage
a lot
people
have experiences about
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with
refund
process Correct article usage
the refund
from
online. It takes a while to get your product and hard to get Change preposition
apply
refund
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a refund
the refund
except
major Add the preposition
forexcept
company
. For these reasons, visual products assist Fix the agreement mistake
companies
people
’s decisions.
On top of that, It is difficult to access on
online Change preposition
apply
shop
for elderly generations. Because they are not used to Fix the agreement mistake
shops
use
new technologies Wrong verb form
using
such
as purchase , refund , communicate
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communication
Add an article
the process
process
. For Fix the agreement mistake
processes
instant
, older Add an article
an instant
consumers’ve
communicated in person Correct your spelling
consumers
not
on websites, so they can get what they want right away. Add the comma(s)
,not
However
, online shops
don’t respond immediately If they have a
some questions, they have to go through Remove the article
apply
chatting
programs. Change the form of the verb
chat
Also
it takes time to get their answer back. Add a comma
,Also
Therefore
, old people
like to shopping
in person. Change the form of the verb
shop
As a result
, some people
think visual shops
are more convenient than online.
To sum up, base
on Wrong verb form
based
Correct your spelling
the
thee
reasons mentioned above, I think actual Correct your spelling
the
shops
provide benefits to curtain
consumers. One more thing to keep in mind is that stores give us Correct your spelling
certain
better
idea of item selection than online Add an article
a better
shops
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