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Nowadays, it is common for people to get married in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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In most parts of the community , the age of
marriage
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 is after 30 years rather than the twenties , which was practised previously.
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 ,
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 new development has positive facts like a good platform for starting family
life
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 and a good environment for improving the lateral carrier like a job .
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 ,
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 writer is in complete agreement with the statement that the get married around 30y will help society .
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 with , when we consider society , most of the communities in the developing nations practise underage
marriage
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 . Unfortunately , most of these young couples do not have a big idea about
life
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 and they stagnate their
life
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 with a vast amount of unaffordable responsibilities at a young age .
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 , there are multiple family conflicts and most of them are separated after a very limited married
life
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 .
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 , one of the research published in Sri Lankan university has shown, about 50% of couples ,who got married before their
thirties
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 will separate within 1y of
marriage
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 . At the same time , when someone gets married after their
thirties
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 , they will have a good time engaging in other activities like education and occupation .
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 , They can spend much attention on their work-related commitments and they get a chance to be promoted in their job .
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 , according to the report published by the central bank of Sri Lanka in 2021 , most of the young executives in the private and public sectors were unmarried up to 30years , compare to their counterparts who are married in their twenties, still in the preliminary stage of their carrier . In conclusion , there is a trend among young generations to get married after their
thirties
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instead
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 of the twenties and below.
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 will give them a chance to fulfil their career success, as well as ,
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 will lead to good
marriage
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life
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 . Since
then
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,
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 writer is in complete agreement with the fact that the practice of
marriage
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 in the
thirties
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 will help society in a positive way .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • personal growth
  • mature and stable relationships
  • rates of divorce
  • family conflicts
  • thoughtful and compatible matches
  • self-knowledge
  • healthier families
  • stronger community ties
  • declining birth rates
  • aging populations
  • workforce replenishment
  • economic sustainability
  • higher quality of life
  • financially and emotionally prepared
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