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In cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours. There is no longer sense of community. What do you think are the causes of this problem and suggest methods to solve it?

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It is generally accepted that more and more
people
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 have no connection with their
neighbours
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 and lack a sense of belonging.
This
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 essay will explore the reasons and suggest improving the situation. The
first
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 reason
people
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 become indifferent to their
neighbours
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 is that an increasing number of
people
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 are moving their accommodations too fast to bond a connection with their
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-door.
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, aim to reduce commute time, most
people
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 will choose an apartment downtown.
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, there, the rent of their apartments and the requirement of the landlord changed often, which made
people
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 have to move to other places to ensure the balance of the budget. They are busy struggling to make ends meet and have no free time to have conversations with their
neighbours
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.
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, the social culture is changed as well,
people
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 are not expected to invite other
people
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 who live in the same
community
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 to have dinner with them, and other members of the
community
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 do not have a social responsibility to introduce neighbourhood. So, when
people
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 do not have access to bond relationships with their
neighbours
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, they can not feel a sense of
community
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. To improve the situation,
people
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 should interact more with their
neighbours
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 and participate more in
community
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 activities,
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 as paying more attention to the notice board of their
community
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, taking part in activities, and helping their
neighbours
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 when they need to do them a favour. As for the
community
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, the leader should organise more events that require engagement with everyone and improve the quality of activity to attract more
community
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 participation.
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, hold regular
community
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-themed parties or use
community
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 parks to show open-air films when new movies are launched. In conclusion,
people
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 are moving a lot and social culture changed to make the trend that an increasing population have not connected with their
neighbours
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 and become a loner in their
community
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.
People
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 should not isolate themselves, and the
community
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 needs to organise more activities to attract
people
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 to join in.

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