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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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There is a controversial issue among people regarding the fact that do
children
 should grow up in the
city
 or in the
countryside
.In my point of view , the
city
 plays an important role in
children
's lives and in
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the arguments and my opinion is
also
 included.
Firstly
, some people argue that in order to raise your
children
 in the right way it is better to choose to live in a
city
 .
For instance
, cities are good because it provides so many educational facilities and offers a wide range of programmes .
Moreover
, kids can participate in a lot of social activities and there are so many amenities in the
city
 that everyone can get benefit from it.
On the contrary
, a significant number of individuals claim that the
countryside
 is the best option for
children
 .It is their view that
children
 must be free and enjoy the peace and quiet of the
countryside
 and can get rid of hustle and bustle of
city
 life .
As a result
, it is a slight chance to have more life expectancy and they no longer suffer from anxiety and stress. I am in favour of the opinion that the
city
 promotes higher standards of living so parents are more convenient to raise their
children
 and nurture them . In conclusion,
Although
, the
countryside
 can provide a healthy lifestyle , clearly
this
 area never offer higher levels of education and can damage the future of every individual. Unless government provide some facilities and amenities and upgrade them , there is not any chance for them to have a bright future .
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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