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Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of violence in films on television and at the cinema.Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 day and age,some
people
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 think that regulating the level of
violence
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 in
movies
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 is a necessary job.But others feel that
violence
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 takes an important part and should not be limited.In my opinion,the government should have the solution to control and keep the violent
scenes
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 at a suitable level. On the one hand,some
people
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 believe that the government should not limit violent
scenes
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people
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 of
films
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 on TV or theatre.
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 of all,some violent
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 in
movies
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 have a great impact on the economic sides of the
films
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.Their fans may experience some new special effects they have never met before.In fact,there are numerous
movies
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 that still have
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a fight
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fight
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fights
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 and violent actions that are popular to worldwide fans
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 as The Avengers,Spider-Man.
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,many directors create violent
movies
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 in order to educate students under 18 about the dangers of criminals in social life.
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,students can study from the
films
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 and prepare to face
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similar situations in the future.
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,I would side with those
people
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 who believe the
violence
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 in
films
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 should be under control.
Violence
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 has bad effects on children’s mental health and their ability to control their behaviours.Certainly,after watching
movies
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 containing fights and bloody
scenes
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,
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 can become a nightmare to young children and shock children's young minds.
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, children have a tendency to copy the actions on TV and cause criminals for their own satisfaction.
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, having numerous of
violence
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do
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 not mean the
films
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 have high viewerships.The ratings of
movies
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 are based on different factors.It depends on each individual and their favourite kind of film.Too much
violence
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 can make the
films
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 less fascinating and choosy. To conclude,
violence
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 is an unchanged factor in the process of producing
films
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,but the governments should limit the dangerous scene and keep it suitable for
people
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 of all ages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regulation
  • vulnerable groups
  • age restrictions
  • censorship
  • real-life aggression
  • healthier society
  • creative freedom
  • free speech
  • artistic vision
  • cultural narratives
  • personal responsibility
  • viewing choices
  • balanced approach
  • rating systems
  • parental guidance
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