The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.
The line graphs illustrate the information
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student enrollment, international and native in Australian universities from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
, it is clear from the graphs that the total of local
students
was higher than foreign
students
,
Although
the commencing of natives was less than foreign
students
. Apparently, the total number of international
students
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noticeably increased from 20,000
students
to 80,000
students
in a decade.
While
the commencing
students
were slightly rising from under 20,000
students
in 2001 to 20,000
students
in 2006.
Additionally
, there were continuously
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up to 40,000
students
in 2009. It
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constant through 2010.
In addition
, the total enrollment of native admission was a significant increase from 400,000
students
in 2001 to 600,000
students
in 2007.
Moreover
, the graphs show remain stable at 600,000
students
from 2007 to 2010, which is three times higher than the commencing in 2010. There was a highest commencing in 2002.
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