The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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households
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for housework in one country in 1920 and 2019. The figures are given in percentage and Add a missing verb
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hours
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As can be seen from the graphs, the percentages of households
with electrical equipment were
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while
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The historical trends show in 1920, the washing machine was more popular than the refrigerator and the vacuum cleaner ,Add an article
the housework
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the popularity of the washing machine had fallen in 1960. In addition
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number of households
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the
vacuum cleaner were higher than Correct article usage
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washing
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On the other hand
, The number of hours
per week continuously decreased from 50 hours
in 1920 to 20 hours
in 1960. It slowly falls to 10 hours
per week in 2019.Submitted by nurna_nadia on
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