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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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It is seen that there are some
places
 in the US where a
night
 curfew is imposed for
teenagers
 in which without accompanying by an adult they are not allowed to go out after a particular time at
night
.
This
 is a debatable issue indeed. In my opinion,
teenagers
 should not be allowed to go out at
night
 alone. There are several reasons for
this
.
Firstly
, some
places
 in the US is not safe, especially at
night
. The crime rate is quite high in those
places
. Robbery, attacking women or children is very common, unfortunately. In spite of having the police patrolling in those areas during the
night
,
such
 incidents cannot be avoided.
This
 is one reason for which the local Administration has to take
such
 drastic steps to combat
this
 situation.
On the other hand
, nowadays, nightclubs and parties are very popular among young adults and
teenagers
. They want to enjoy themselves with friends in the pubs consuming alcohol and drugs.
As a result
, it is often seen that young boys and girls get addicted to alcohol and even drugs, which can ruin their future. In most cases, they do not listen to their parents or guardians. To control
such
 circumstances it is required to impose some rules. In conclusion, according to me, some strict rules should be imposed by the administration on
teenagers
 in some
places
 in the US to avoid any unfortunate incident at
night
.
Although
 some people may think that it is a violation of human rights apparently,
this
 is necessary to take some action to save the future of young boys and girls.
This
 is for the betterment of society.
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