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It is a commonly held belief that the death penalty is a good deterrent to prevent heinous crimes. However, others believe that life long sentence is a better deterrent. Discuss both views.

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Now the world has come to a place where the Department of Police holds major authority rather compared to the law and justice, but in the past where the world was ruled by the Kings, Tahsildar's.
This
 difference holds a wide impact on how justice is done. The
death
penalty
 and
Life
 long sentence punishments fashion have become significantly popular in developing countries majorly in India.
However
, in
this
 essay let's attempt to give analogies for both views. We all know that
death
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penalty
 has emerged many centuries ago,
although
, it differs from now for whom it is sentenced
to
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apply
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. Earlier, when the world was ruled by kings, the
death
penalty
 is majorly for the individuals who are adamant to listen and follow rules, soldiers, or their trustworthy's betrays or swindle the King,
moreover
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 it was done by sword kill, bow, and arrow, etc but now it's through hanging. The belief of the
death
penalty
 is a good weapon in some,
its
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 because washing away their sins, and crimes is the best solution rather
feeding
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 them.
Besides
,
this
 type of punishment raises fear of
life
 before committing a heinous crime or attack on someone.
Life
-Long Sentence, a
life
 where you can pretty much live healthily with an inch difference of luxurious
life
. Some folks believe that
this
 can be a
better intended
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 punishment to make them suffer for what they did. By
this
, they can live with regret and guilt which is the greatest punishment of all. To conclude, both views have equal respect
of
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 pros and cons, mostly differs
from
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on
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 the impact of crime.
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