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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays there is an increasing number of migration cases
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, it might be problematic since not all migrants know the language of the country they are moving to. Even though there are some obvious benefits, I consider that it is hard to adapt to a new society for an average human being. The first case is moving out of the home country at the individual’s will to search for a better
life
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 and financial conditions. In that scenario,
people
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 have an exact understanding of their
life
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 abroad,
however
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, even these
people
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 usually experience lots of stress and loneliness.
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, these kinds of
people
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 are more likely to feel guilty and ungrateful for missing their homeland and forgetting about
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 present
life
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. The second situation is related to “migrants by a force” who didn’t have enough time to visualize their foreign
life
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, but they were imagining one thing — surviving.
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, they have the highest stress levels, since they are less likely to know the language, culture, or other factors and conditions by which local citizens live.
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, migrants might not have any financial stability and support
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 losing their jobs and not being able to be hired. Eventually, these
people
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 need to take care not only for themselves but
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 their
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, and lack of basic resources might be detrimental.
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,
although
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 migration can significantly benefit individuals in some ways, in most cases it is not an immediate and easy solution for the majority of
people
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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