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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationship people make??

#people #technology #relationship
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Technology
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 nowadays is changing the
bahavior
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behaviour
 of
people
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 and changing the way
people
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 talk . Overall,the impact of
technology
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 is on
people
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 .so the way
people
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 talk has changed.
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,
technology
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 is important in everyone's life .
technology
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 is used in all filled.
however
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,our popularity among the
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 has decreased .
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 due to COVID -19 only online study has
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started
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 in the school so our rush among the
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 has decreased .even the children stopped playing because of the study.
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,
technology
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 in changes
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 saved .
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people
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 time and
peoples
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 work is faster
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 can easily get a job so
people
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 are changing .
people
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 cannot celebrate any festival as it is spring in their work so there is no relationship between
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. I think stream
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 is more important for
relationship
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however
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, relationship act
people
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 stay connected with another country and
people
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 can experiment with another country.
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