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It is important for all cities and towns to build outdoor public spaces like squares and parks. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#cities #towns #spaces #squares #parks
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Whereas the construction of parks and squares in
cities
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 and towns makes them more conducive places for
residents
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, I disagree that all
cities
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 should be the same standard and their backgrounds should be taken into account. It is clear that public
spaces
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 provide rooms for urban
residents
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 to unwind and rewind.
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 of being surrounded by concrete jungles,
residents
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 could have some
spaces
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 in the park to release their stress and recharge their batteries.
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, after completing a laborious task, they can take a stroll or jog in the park, while enjoying the natural scenery.
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 allows them to temporarily forget about their hectic workload.
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, if there are not enough outdoor public
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 for
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, many of them will be overstressed by their work.
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, I argue that not all
cities
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 and towns should construct outdoor public
areas
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 as there are more priorities that require governments’ attention. Other issues like education disparity, unemployment and poverty are directly linked to the quality of life of the
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.
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, governments of
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 that are plagued by these issues should address these issues
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 before allocating funds to build more public
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. India,
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, some of its
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 are impoverished and millions of its people are living below the poverty line. For these
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, before governments could lift their people out of poverty, they should not spend their budget on building public
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 like parks and gardens. In conclusion,
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 outdoor public
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 are crucial in urban
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 as it offers a place for inhabitors to relax, I believe that not all
cities
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 should spend their funds on constructing public
spaces
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, they should concentrate on ameliorating the life of their
residents
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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