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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions?

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There is an explosive rise in the number of crimes committed by youngsters both in the cities and villages. The urge to make quick money and
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 issue. Providing better education on creating awareness of constant bound to problem-solving. In the forthcoming
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 to solve it.
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 the lack of regeneration in many rural and suburban areas, youth choose the easiest and fastest way to earn money for their needs. Thereby, betake to illegal actions
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 as burglary or drug trafficking.
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 year the number of young criminals in Mexico reached the highest point
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 of money to live. They used to do human trafficking or import illegal drugs to other countries.
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, it is difficult to avoid or prevent
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, parents should take responsibility
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 their wards and impart moral values to them.
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 may be effective if they are monitored by adults and surrounded by a law-abiding circle.
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, parents must check
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 surroundings and be interested in their lives.
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 of proper upbringing and involvement
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 youngers' lives, they can be fenced off a crime. In conclusion, despite the fact that youth are deviating from the false path, and are committing serious offences, I believe, that
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 can be prevented if parents play their role in raising their children properly.

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task response
The essay partially addresses the reasons for the rise in youth crime and provides some solutions. However, it lacks depth and clarity in explaining the causes and offering comprehensive solutions.
coherence cohesion
The essay displays a basic logical structure, but lacks coherence and cohesion in the organization of ideas. The introduction and conclusion are present, but the supporting points lack clear and consistent development.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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