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Parents and family background have more influence than teachers on a young person's learning and academic achievement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Young people's enthusiasm mostly comes from their family, mainly from the successful academic achievements of their elder siblings or their
parents
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. Indeed, schooling is still an indispensable part of academic education for
children
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 but education does not only come from schooling but
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 their family, their friends, and personal experiences among many other ways. So I believe that
parents
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 and family have more influence, as there is no doubt that they are the ones who will support everything important to their
children
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 throughout their life.
Parents
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 are the only people in their life for many
children
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 during their
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 few years of life but there are many different
teachers
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 for many different kinds of subjects for them so not every teacher can have an influence on them but surely, every parent can.
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, it can say that
children
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 can not stay with
teachers
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 every day so, during their free time, they learn mostly from their
parents
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.
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, most
children
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 want to be like their
parents
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 when they grow up is proving
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the influences of
parents
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 on them.
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, it is
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 true that
children
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 are
also
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 influenced by their
teachers
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.
Firstly
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,
children
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 spend most of their productive day at schools and
teachers
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 educate them about various subjects
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 as history and science.
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,
school
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the school
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 prepares relationships outside their family with a proper setting to learn how to
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 and communicate with peer
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 and how to compete and cooperate with one another without hurting them. To sum up, in terms of learning and academic achievements, it seems that
parents
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 and family have more influence than
teachers
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 on young people,
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,
teachers
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also
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 have significant roles to play in academic education for
children
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.
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