Parents and family background have more influence than teachers on a young person's learning and academic achievement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Young people's enthusiasm mostly comes from their family, mainly from the successful academic achievements of their elder siblings or their
parents
. Indeed, schooling is still an indispensable part of academic education for
children
but education does not only come from schooling but
also
their family, their friends, and personal experiences among many other ways. So I believe that
parents
and family have more influence, as there is no doubt that they are the ones who will support everything important to their
children
throughout their life.
Parents
are the only people in their life for many
children
during their
first
few years of life but there are many different
teachers
for many different kinds of subjects for them so not every teacher can have an influence on them but surely, every parent can.
Also
, it can say that
children
can not stay with
teachers
every day so, during their free time, they learn mostly from their
parents
.
For example
, most
children
want to be like their
parents
when they grow up is proving
that
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the influences of
parents
on them.
However
, it is
also
true that
children
are
also
influenced by their
teachers
.
Firstly
,
children
spend most of their productive day at schools and
teachers
educate them about various subjects
such
as history and science.
Secondly
,
school
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prepares relationships outside their family with a proper setting to learn how to
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and communicate with peer
group
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and how to compete and cooperate with one another without hurting them. To sum up, in terms of learning and academic achievements, it seems that
parents
and family have more influence than
teachers
on young people,
however
,
teachers
also
have significant roles to play in academic education for
children
.
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