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Some people say that it is more important to plant trees in the open spaces in towns and cities than build more housing. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is thought by some populations that the most essential to growing different kinds of
trees
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 in the field spaces in the villages and
cities
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 rather than to construct a plethora of housing. On the one hand, a number of communities say that it is more and more important to plant various
trees
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 in the open areas in towns and
cities
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 than to construct the amount of housing and it may be an excellent way for the community.
People
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 can be in good health with different kinds of
trees
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 due to the fact that the majority of greenery releases oxygen from themselves, and
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 oxygen makes a person healthier.
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, at the present ,time every person is planting a plethora of
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 in their own home.
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, if the atmosphere is great for
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,
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result
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 disease may be less in the world.
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, a plethora of
people
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think
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 that in towns and
cities
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 must build more and more apartments for
people
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. Because
people
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 are increasing in every family day by day in the world and
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 dwelling is the most important for them.
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, if more and more buildings and houses are built in
cities
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 and towns, there will be more improvement in those places. To sum up,
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 some favour building new houses in open spaces to supply new homes, I agree with the view of planting greenery in those areas.
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 because I believe that the local's health level is far more important than creating short term poorly planned housing solutions.
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