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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Today in all over the world
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 can purchase some goods, and I have the same idea.
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 day by day, countries have been more similar.
People
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 put on the latest trend clothes in their own country. Consider a brand like Nike produces some new dresses, including T-shirts, trainers, jumpers, hats. Since
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, they have sent them to every continent for their branches in all points of the earth; it doesn't matter where you live; if you want to provide some clothes, only enough go to the nearest Nike shop and buy them. I recently have bought a Nike jumper from Isfahan city
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 which has 5 km distance to my house. Another reason why I agree with
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 task is technology, which has been incredible progress in many aspects of our lives, that impressed us. Particularly I want to mention social media like WhatsApp, Instagram, and Facebook that
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 use every day. So in less time,
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 giving information by mobile phones, laptops, TVs and some things like them had a massive share of similarity.
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, when Apple Company shows the latest version of the iPhone on social media wherever you are, you can see that and buy it easily. Of course, there are some exceptions that you can't close your eyes on, like local production in your country,
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, in my hometown,
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 make traditional clothes that I love.
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, you can't find them in other places in the world. In conclusion, I think countries are becoming more similar because of easy access to products and technology development;
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, cultures are more close together too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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