In genergal, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

Nowadays,
people
are not as close to their
neighbours
as they used to be.
This
essay will explain why
neighbours
do not have close relationships and it will suggest how
this relationships
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this relationship
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can be improved. The first reason
people
do not get
along with
their
neighbours
is
the
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their
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busy
life style
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lifestyle
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since they work a lot from morning to evening. Adults and students are usually busy with their work and study, so they do not have enough energy and chances to make friends with their
neighbours
when they finish their things.
For instance
, many designers always work until midnight and when they come back home their
neighbours
are already
sleep
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asleep
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.
Also
, citizen
move
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a lot as their job opportunities are more than that
of
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in the past.
As a result
,
people
need to move to different places to save commute time, and
then
they can not develop
a
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long
friendship
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friendships
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with others. The first suggestion for
people
to get a good relationship with their
neighbours
is that the government should create some community facilities. If
people
live in an apartment with many public facilities
such
as parks, they will often meet each other when they
do
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exercise there.
For example
, many elderly usually keep a good relationship with their
neighbours
because they often do square
dance
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dances
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together in the park.
Moreover
,
people
should make time to meet
neighbours
, share food, and join online
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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group
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. In
this
way, they will get familiar with each other and get chances to help their
neighbours
. In conclusion, the busy
life style
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lifestyle
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and moving a lot make
people
lose chances to develop friendships with their
neighbours
. In
this
situation,
people
should keep in touch with their
neighbors
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neighbours
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through social media and the government could construct some entertainment facilities around their
home
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homes
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for the public to meet each other.
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