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people sleep less than they used to sleep in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? what are the effects on individual?

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In the past generation, people show their tendencies towards enough naps.
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, In these days, communities are thoroughly bound with the short nap due to different reasons. I opine, the modern public may have different tasks to do as the routines, so it may enhance enormous ramifications effect for human beings
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 as stress, anxiety and internal aggression.
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, there have numerous reasons behind
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 calamitous effect. In contemporary ,society most human beings have different tasks to do as a basic need. They may thoroughly mingle with day-to-day activities. There is compelling evidence to prove that, society may follow deep-rooted social status so they do not think about their mental conditions or physical activity because of the commitment and perseverance for collecting money which may represent their status.
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, they may not assume their physical fitness or mental conditions. They do have not enough time to take for mental stability because of the monotonous and hectic work schedule.
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, in the present days, community are suffering from heavy tax or living costs as well as there have 3 or 4 children Tim each family
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 they have heavy responsibilities to maintain them. Owning to variously calamitous effects they may not take enough naps for their body. 
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, there are numerous ramifications when the community do not take enough rest or naps for their bodies. When facing mentally unstable which may accelerate depression, stress, anxiety as well as internal aggression due to the lack of mental freedom.
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, the public who come from fragile communities may lead to poverty, starvation and vigorous hunger, so they may show their desire to work more than 9 hours without thinking about their power because of the overtime payment.  To sum up, lack of proper sleep schedules society would face different calamitous effects for their body, so they should take enough sleep to maintain their physical fitness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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